下面的申请论文样本由Felicity为2013年前的普通申请的个人论文选项4撰写：“描述小说中的人物、历史人物或对你有影响的创造性作品（如艺术、音乐、科学等），并解释其影响。”在当前的普通申请中，这篇短文对于短文选项1来说很有效，它要求学生分享一个关于他们身份的核心的故事。

请注意，Felicity的文章来自通用应用程序实现当前650字长度限制之前。

费利西蒂的大学申请论文

Porkopolis In the South, where I grew up, pork is a vegetable. Actually, it’s used as a “seasoning,” but so commonly that it’s almost impossible to find salad without bacon, greens without fatback, white beans free of pinkish shreds of ham. It was difficult for me, then, when I decided to become a vegetarian. The decision itself, made for the usual reasons of health, ethics and ecological conservation, was easy; putting it into practice, however, was another matter. At every restaurant, every school lunch, every church potluck, every family gathering, there was meat—in the entrée, the sides, the condiments. I suspected even innocent-seeming pie crusts of secretly harboring lard. Eventually I worked out a system: I brought my own lunches to school, asked servers about the broth used in the soup of the day, avoided the usual suspects of beans and greens. This system worked well enough in public, but at home, I faced the challenge of respecting my parents and harmoniously sharing meals with them. They were excellent cooks, both of them, and I had always enjoyed the country-fried steaks, burgers and ribs they’d served to me for so many years—how could I now say “no” to those delicacies without angering or inconveniencing them, or, worse, hurting their feelings? I couldn’t. And so, I backslid. I’d manage to live a pure, meatless life for a few weeks, subsisting on pasta and salads. Then, Dad would grill an especially juicy teriyaki-marinated flank steak, look at me hopefully, and offer a slice—and I would accept. I’d mend my ways, steam rice and stir-fry snow peas with mushrooms . . . and crumble at the first whiff of the Thanksgiving turkey roasting in the oven and the proud smile on my mother’s face. My noble goals, it seemed, were doomed. But then, I found a role model, one who demonstrated to me that I could live without meat and still be a functioning member of society, eschew my parents’ pork chops and fried chicken without giving offense. I wish I could say that I was inspired by one of history’s great artists like Leonardo da Vinci, or a leader and inventor like Benjamin Franklin, but no. My inspiration was Lisa Simpson. Let me pause here to acknowledge how absurd it is to be inspired by an animated sitcom character, albeit one as smart and together as Lisa. Yet it was the very absurdity of feeling, somehow, moved by Lisa’s resolve and strength of character, her refusal to compromise her beliefs, that convinced me I could follow her example. In the pivotal episode, Lisa is tortured by visions of the lamb whose chops provide her family’s dinner. “Please, Lisa, don’t eat me!” the imaginary lamb implores her. She is moved by ethics, yet almost breaks her resolution when Homer prepares a pig roast and is hurt by his daughter’s refusal to partake. Like me, Lisa is torn between her convictions and her fear of disappointing her father (not to mention the undeniable deliciousness of pork). But she manages to explain her beliefs to Homer and show him that her rejection of meat is not a rejection of him—that she can share his table and his love while still living according to her principles. Again, I admit—as inspirations go, this one is a little ridiculous. No imaginary lamb-conscience spoke to me, and unlike Lisa, I was not able to celebrate my vegetarian lifestyle by triumphantly singing with Quickie-Mart manager Apu and guest stars Paul and Linda McCartney. But seeing the very obstacles that stymied me being overcome by a yellow-skinned, spiky-haired caricature was so silly that my difficulties, too, seemed silly. “Well heck,” I thought, “if Lisa Simpson—a cartoon character, for heaven’s sake— can stick to her guns, then so can I.” So I did. I told my parents that I had decided to really commit myself to vegetarianism, that this was not a passing phase, that I was not judging or seeking to convert them, but that this was simply something I had decided for myself. They agreed, perhaps a bit patronizingly, but as the months went on and I continued to forego the chicken in my fajitas and the sausage gravy on my biscuits, they became more supportive. We worked together on compromise. I took on a larger role in preparing the meals, and reminded them to please use vegetable stock in the potato soup and to reserve a separate pot of plain spaghetti sauce before adding the ground beef. When we attended a potluck, we made sure that one of the dishes we brought was a meatless entrée, so that I would be guaranteed at least one edible dish at the pork-laden table. I did not tell my parents, or anyone else, that Lisa Simpson had helped me say no, forever, to eating meat. Doing so would cast the decision, one that many teenagers passionately make for a few months and then abandon, in the light of well-intentioned immaturity. But Lisa did help me live a more healthy, ethical, and ecologically sound life—to say no to pork, in all its guises.

费利西蒂大学入学论文评论

总的来说，费利西蒂为她的普通申请写了一篇优秀的文章。然而，她确实冒了一些可能适得其反的风险。下面的评论检查了这篇文章的许多优点以及一些潜在的问题。

论文题目

费利西蒂当然避免了一些最糟糕的论文主题，但当学生被要求为申请论文撰写关于虚构或历史人物的文章时，招生官希望找到一篇关于马丁·路德·金、亚伯拉罕·林肯或阿尔伯特·爱因斯坦等可能的嫌疑人的文章。对于小说和艺术，申请者倾向于大张旗鼓——简·奥斯汀的女主人公、莫奈的画作、罗丹的雕塑、贝多芬的交响乐。

那么，我们如何看待一篇聚焦于像丽莎·辛普森这样看似微不足道的卡通人物的文章呢？设身处地为招生官着想。阅读成千上万的大学申请书是一件乏味的事情，所以任何不寻常的东西都可能是一件好事。同时，这篇文章不能太离奇或肤浅，以致于不能揭示作者的技巧和性格。

费利西蒂在她的文章中冒了一个险，她把重点放在了一个相当愚蠢的虚构角色模型上。不过，她的话题处理得很好。她承认自己的关注点很奇怪，同时，她写了一篇与丽莎·辛普森无关的文章。这篇文章是关于费利西蒂的，它成功地展示了她的性格深度、内心冲突和个人信念。

论文题目

头衔可能很难，这就是为什么许多申请者会跳过它们。不要。一个好的标题可以吸引读者的注意力，使他或她渴望阅读你的文章。

“波科波利斯”并没有明确说明这篇文章是关于什么的，但奇怪的标题仍然让我们好奇，并把我们拉进了这篇文章。事实上，这个头衔的优点也是它的缺点。“波科波利斯”到底是什么意思？这篇文章是关于猪的，还是关于一个猪肉消费过多的大都市？而且，标题并没有告诉我们Felicity将讨论什么样的人物或艺术作品。我们想通过阅读文章来理解标题，但有些读者可能会欣赏标题中的更多信息。

费利西蒂文章的语调

一篇成功的文章的基本写作技巧之一是加入一点幽默，以保持文章的趣味性和吸引力。费利西蒂以奇妙的效果管理幽默。她的文章绝不是肤浅或轻率的，但她的南方猪肉菜肴目录和对丽莎·辛普森的介绍很可能会让读者发笑。

然而，这篇文章的幽默与费利西蒂在生活中面临的挑战的严肃讨论相平衡。尽管选择了丽莎·辛普森作为榜样，但费利西蒂给人的印象是，她是一个有思想、有爱心的人，努力将他人的需求与自己的信念结合起来。

写作评价

费利西蒂的文章是在目前650字的普通申请论文限制之前写的。这篇文章大约850字，需要减少200字才能符合新的指导方针。然而，在写这篇文章时，费利西蒂的文章篇幅很长，特别是因为没有明显的绒毛或离题。此外，费利西蒂显然是一位很强的作家。这篇散文优美流畅。对风格和语言的掌握标志着费利西蒂作为一名作家能够在美国顶尖的学院和大学里表现出色。

费利西蒂以她幽默的第一句话吸引了我们的注意力，而这篇文章始终吸引着我们的兴趣，因为它在严肃与异想天开、个人与普遍、真实与虚构之间的转换。这些句子反映了这些变化，如短短语和长短语以及简单和复杂的句子结构之间的恰当性变化。

很可能有严格的语法学家会反对费利西蒂随意使用破折号，以及她在一些清单中没有“和”这个词来介绍最后的项目。此外，有人可能会对她在句子开头使用连词（和，但，但是）作为过渡词表示异议。然而，大多数读者将费利西蒂视为一位灵巧、富有创造力和才华的作家。在她的作品中任何违反规则的行为都会产生积极的修辞效果。

关于费利西蒂申请论文的最后思考

像大多数好文章一样，费利西蒂的文章也不是没有风险的。她可能会遇到一位招生官，他认为选择丽莎·辛普森会贬低这篇个人文章的目的。

然而，细心的读者会很快意识到费利西蒂的文章并不琐碎。当然，费利西蒂可能植根于流行文化，但她从这篇文章中脱颖而出，成为一位热爱家庭但不怕捍卫自己信念的作家。她体贴周到，顽皮严肃，内向外向。简言之，她听起来是一个很值得邀请加入校园社区的人。